Tilting at snowfall (revised again)

Snow soon howls down
wind carved broken moon
sky cowled Queen glares

knight lash armour tight
wool cinch hoarse throat
lungs bellow arsenal fire

chant valedictory oath
brave eye-spitting cold
mount white walls warrior

launch wide blade imperial
charge screaming battlement
heart stagger triumph hero

[This revision is courtesy of interaction with the cheery band of poet-critics at WildPoetry.com. In it, I have tried to merge my response to requests for a more regular meter and more verbs. I suggest that one keep in mind the title while reading this, and my background studies years ago in Old English battle poetry . . . ] 

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Poet, playwright, duplicate bridge player, website designer, cottager, husband, father, grandfather, former athlete, carpenter, computer helper for my friends, theatre designer, backstage polymath, retired teacher of highschool English, drama, art, a baritone singer in a barbershop quartet, who knows what else?

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